Plans for Essay 1
I need to cut the fat; there's some excess words in there that don't help carry the story. I'm not sure every single sentence is necessary, either.
After my meeting, I feel like I'm getting much closer to the point of this story. I think that I did ok implementing segmenting, however, I will revisit that.
Dr. Chandler commented that it seemed a bit choppy with many transitions, though she was able to follow the story; I will try to trim down and tighten it up a bit.
The title – I just slapped it on, but really, I'm not sure it even relates to the meaning.
I do think that, in time, this story will be easier to write once it has percolated a bit.
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